Any advice on this style?

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Lottery ticket companies and fruit distributors work very closely in order to coax gamblers into buying more of both.

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I drafted some freestyle lyrics

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Balls

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Tried to keep it more simple since that’s the advice I’ve been getting

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Main advice that I’ve been getting is to remove the add ons so I made it only my tag

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Guests

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Which one do I use

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Crits?

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Can I get advice on what to add/remove and generally on how to improve?

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